I made a babysitting flyer! Tell me how you similar to it and what to adjust or attach.? Question: XXX Summer Babysitting! - My name is Brooke XXXX. I

Question: XXX Summer Babysitting!
- My name is Brooke XXXX. I am 14, soon to be 15
- 3 years of babysitting experience
- Baby-sit children 10 months-10 years
- Live neighbouring in XXX Knolls
- I am trustworthy, honest, reliable, loyal, responsible, and a great, loving babysitter
- I hold general familiarity through a special class in university in first aid, CPR, and babysitting (infants and children) and will be certified contained by the future.
- I am available most days throughout the week after 1:00 PM and weekends adjectives day and I am also available through academy year. Call me to see when I am available.
- I am negotiable on the price per hour (depends on how abundant kids), pet friendly, and will give 100% full attention to your kids.
- I will also bring small, non-messy events for the children to do
- Will do small house work like cleaning.
- I am of a mind to work anywhere in the XXX nouns

Contact me for more information or questions atĄ­ Home: XXXXXXX
Cell: XXXXXX
Email:XXXXXXReferences available!


I am looking forward to hear from you!
Have a great and nontoxic summer!
looks flawless sweetie,good luck.enjoy a great summer as well.




Answers:
I liked Melamom's guidance for shortening and perhaps creating "bullets" for your highlights!

I be going to suggest at least taking out the phrase:
"Call me to see when I am available." (They will do that anyway, and too lots "availables".)

And shortening this:
"I have standard knowledge through a special class contained by school within first aid, CPR, and babysitting (infants and children) and will be certified in the adjectives." The phrase "general knowledge" is pale, and I found confusing. I was going to suggest "Took special class surrounded by school within first aid, CPR, & babysitting; soon to be certified."

I would definitely NOT include exact address contained by your town, just read aloud "near Park Slope contained by Anytown" os some such.

I also LIKED that you said 14 soon to be 15, because it gives a better view of age level.

One of my crucial suggestions would be at the top to say something similar to "Summer Babysitting...and Beyond", since you are saying you are also available during arts school year; don't rule out people who are looking for someone more unchanging.

Also be sure to put your "header" re babysitting in a really roomy font to catch people's eyes; your second vein might be "fee negotiable"; use colored dissertation or decoration for sure.
thats really fitting im sure u'll get society

It sounds honourable mostly. The XXX things are suggestive of sex and bad behavior, unless you are a prostitute or wnt to be one, bring them out of the add. Also, you don't really want to do housework and cleaning. Take that out of the add on. Say you like a ably stocked fridge and would feed the kids instead. Source(s):
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sounds moral to me, good luck!

It sounds really good. It would be newly better, when you would change one of the " available " into another word. (for example you can get me, or I am present)

"I am available most days throughout the week after 1:00 PM and weekends all year and I am also available through school year. Call me to see when I am available."

It sounds better, when you don't repeat available so plentiful times

It's missing one important entity... get some testimonials from population you've worked for and put them on your flyer. Just get a few comments from your optimistic, thrilled customers and put them on your flyer. That will help you attain more business...

Sounds GREAT! Good Luck! bye

very full of atmosphere - i would hire you in a heart vanquish

are you serious?
1.PLEASE tell me you hold some decorations to that
if you do then you are fine
and if you don't....
geez
why don't you a short time ago add i am an organize dork up there too??

Sounded good to me!

That is sooo much better than anything I would've made!

that's apt

Very informative, although I think it's TOO Much information for a flyer...honestly...I wouldn't finish reading adjectives of it.

Just an idea...


Summer Babysitting
Call Brooke XXX (a) 555-5555
Address contained by xxx Knolls
14 years old
3 years experience
kid sit 10mths-10 years
Trustworthy, honest, responsible
Love working with Children
Will bring small, verbs activities for your child
Pet friendly
Small housecleaning, also available
First aid and CPR through my academy
Will soon Certified in CPR and babysitting
Available after 1pm weekly and anytime on weekends
Will work surrounded by the 555 area
Call for pricing and availability

Contact me for more info:
Home:
Cell:
Email:
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